Saturday, February 25, 2012

5 Sentence Fiction - Yearning

I am so excited because I got to choose this week's Five Sentence Fiction inspiration word at Lillie McFerrin Writes.

So I picked Yearning. If you weren't aware, it's one of my very favorite words and the constant inspiration for this blog. Of course I had to enter!

Despite the fact that I am short on sleep, I scribbled my entry on a tiny square of paper at work, folded it up and smuggled it home to share with you. Be sure to go read the other 'Yearning' entries and maybe enter yourself!


Yearning

He bounded up the wide stone steps two at a time, his heart slamming frantically against the birdcage of his ribs, and flung open her tower chamber door, "Princess!"

The room was strangely still -- even the dove loose in the rafters was hushed -- and white muslin curtains flapped loose in the breeze. A thick rope was knotted tight round the carved mahogany bedpost; his eye traced it across the floor and over the edge of the window sill.

Her pillow, plumped up on her neatly made bed, had a note pinned to the satin coverlet: 'I couldn't wait any more.'


 Far below, he heard departing hoof beats and watched as she rode his horse away.




"Fair Rosamund" (detail) by John William Waterhouse

18 comments:

  1. Oh, I l-o-v-e it!! I've read through it a half dozen times just now and each time it's just as gloriously wrenching!

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    1. Thank you, Ruth! I started to write it from the POV of the princess, but it bored me. This made me half-laugh; it's sad and yet tickles me.

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  2. This is written so beautifully! Love it!!!

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    1. Thank you so much for letting me choose the word this week, Lillie!

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    2. Awesome word choice! Some really beautiful writing as a result!!

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  3. I love that she made her bed before she saved herself.

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    1. Ha, didn't even really think of it! Good catch, Gayle.

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  4. Great imagery! Loved it! Foolish boys are always late, aren't they?

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  5. Loved the visual details... and the princess smart and brave enough seize an opportunity and make her own way.

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    1. *smooches to my Princess Angie* You'd probably just knock him out with the footstool and not bother to shimmy down the rope! :D

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  7. This is brilliant! Love your writing!

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  8. You know this is but 1/2 a story. No self respecting k ight would allow his beloved horse to be taken. The chase is On! EkYARD

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